My entry for SONG FIGHT Tuesday March 12th - Make the First Move. This was another great exercise in time management. Got an earlier start on this one, but ended up playing with the sound so much that I sorta lost my original idea for the tune. Vocals get lost in the mix in quite a few parts, and I don't have a good control on the volume. Think this is a good start, and something to flesh out and clean up a bit more.
o0o0o0o0o0o0o0o. Like those opening harmonies. Nice full sound. I dig it, lots going on with the drums that would sound cool on a real kit, but sound a little distracting this way. Still, great song. - Cord Smith
nice laid-back 6/8 groove, reminiscing. Vocals are a little distant in the mix, but that sort of suits the far-off-in-the-distance lyrical subject matter. - Nobody et al
Liked it in the beginning, changes and vocals kept me listening, song structure and chorus convinced me of the song's full potential. I easily see this in the top 5. Definitely a vote.
- Dejected Motives
Sleek and subtle. Def the mercedes of the crowd. Takes some noticing to see the details but they are def worth it. - Economy Biscuits
I love this tune, man. So much yachty goodness all in one place, and a beefy bass drum. Your vocals are fine, don't hate on em. Embrace that shit. You could slap that drummer around a little and remind him what the fucking genre is. If you have insecurity issues with your singing you need to get that shit checked, you have a really good voice. I don't love the single-note lead throwaway guitar lines over the chorus, you don't need it and we've heard Jonny Default Guitar Line too many times by now. Get some originality in there - play it on the piano and lay on the fuzz or something. Interestingly the drum overplaying makes a lot more sense on the later chorus than on the first - but it's still too much. - Blue
Excellent. Bring the vocals up just a tad, I think. At the "make the first move" in the chorus, I think the supporting vocal would really shine if it stays up on the root of the chord - know what I mean? Happy to clarify if you want. Anyhow, that's a matter of opinion in any case, so please let me know if I should go piss off. This is a rare one that actually works with a longer length at ~4:30 too. A. Related: reading your review was fun, too, though I might be biased because you were awfully kind to me (thanks). - Tuners Union
nice soothing tune, love the final part. maybe a vote - heine
Nice groove and a pleasant voice. This sounds like a John Mayer type song, like something you'd sing for the girls. It's not wimpy (not that 'girl music', if there is such a thing, is or should be) but I can't help but picture a couple of young pretty people in this song. I like the chorus vocals and the instrumentation throughout is well chosen arranged. Great portamento-ish hook. Eh. Maybe I'm a girl. Teasing, this is very good. - Paco del Stinko