Comments by Frimet Goldberger
Ah, Bridget, how clever! An interactive knit hat that goes through your past present and future. I want one. I think I've said this before, but I'll say it again: your voice always matches the tone of your pieces. In this case, the childish voices is a nice juxtaposition to the morbid seriousness of the piece. I love the silence at the end as the final sound you hear before you die. Awesome job!
Really interesting twist on the assignment. I immediately knew this was a personification of an object, but I didn't figure out which one until you opened the drawer. Great sound effect there. Also, the heavy breathing when the spoon drowns in the milk is hilarious. Nice job!
Shelby, your pieces are consistently amazing! Your voice/tone is so perfect for this infomercial; you may want to consider this for a career path ;-). Kudos on pulling this off on conference first draft week. You managed to incorporate sounds/music that fit the themes well. I especially loved the music that goes with "oh, no, your boss is calling you into her office."
Ha ha, John! This is light and so darn funny! Your various sound effects, especially the monster, are great. My only itty bitty critique is the p-pops. Otherwise, great job!
Wow, Ryan, this is superb! It is as good as Whitehead's pieces, especially the ice music one, which you seemed to have mimicked. I love the concept of the "spirit of the time." Your sound effects are spot on, and so are your lines. "There's just no market for that kind of unfiltered reflection." Really, really funny!
Alanna, I had trouble hearing the words over the loud music. I will try listening to it when I get home to hear if it comes through clearer from my home computer.
Amelia, this is so great. Your voice is just perfect for advertisements, as in the other piece you produced last week. I love how you demonstrate how necessary "dream sweet" is by saying things like "are you tired of having your sleep interrupted by unpleasant dreams?" and the line about going naked to prom. The music at around .30 is a little too loud - I had trouble hearing what you said. Also, I feel like you could have gone a little further with the various sounds "dream sweet" produces, something a little more over the top. Otherwise, nice job demonstrating a fictional object.
Kurt, nice ambiance and great writing! "I feel new...no, I feel vintage." I'm not sure this fit the requirement for this week's assignment, but I enjoyed listening to it. I also had trouble coming up with something that is an expert demonstration of a fictional object.
Shambala, this is great! I love how realistic and homey it sounds. I disagree with Amelia about the music; I think it would've killed the authenticity of a home video.
I really, really like this piece, Kurt. The best part of it is the ambiance. It sets the scenes perfectly, and it doesn't sound like ambient overkill, even with all the various sounds you incorporated. The cut to the new scenes can use some smoothing out. Otherwise, great job.