Schlosser Geoff Final Rough

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Geoff Schlosser
Final Project Rough
MPR December 2011
My Final composition was created in the thoughts of it being able to tell a story. I let the song start out flowing very smooth and mellow and I wanted the song to tell its own story. It is very mellow with a few builds of tension; which I would always bring down the tension to make it feel complete. You never want to have that feeling of not knowing the outcome, where the builds in the song almost create a question while listening to the song. Hope you enjoy!

Questions:
1.) Did you feel like the accompaniment (piano) would get too busy with the other instruments being to slow in the background and the piano would then become its own melody and rhythm without the help of the other instruments?
2.) Did you feel like the song had too many transitions? Or other words, was there too much change and not enough repetition between all the instruments working together?
3.) At times I felt that the last 4 measures changed too much in the piano and it didn’t quite finish the song to feel complete. It felt to abrupt to end the song. Was this an issue that you might have noticed as well?

Thank you for listening and I hope you really enjoyed this piece. Notation is definitely new to me and I know I have a lot to learn and many years of practice ahead of me so any criticism is great!
Thank you,
Geoff Schlosser

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  • shane christian
    shane christian on December 15, 2011 04:35

    Nice choice of instruments to voice the different parts of the piece. I really like the melody’s soft, rich sound in the mix. To answer your first question I don’t feel like the accompaniment got too busy however I do feel like the left hand got a little too excited during bars seven through nine. Perhaps quieting the left hand down a little would do the trick, but this is more opinionated than technical. As far as variation goes I liked the differences in each section that you created. The differences in each instrument make them stand out on their own individually at times and when they come back together it gives a sort of exploratory nature to them. With question three I have to agree that I too feel that the last four measures sound a bit sporadic. Perhaps making longer notes and more conjunct motion would allow the song to end more solidly. The ending isn’t bad as it is but I do notice what you’re saying and feel that it could be improved. Overall this is a very nice piece that follows proper convention yet is original and interesting. Congrats and I can’t wait to hear the final version!

    Sincerely,
    Shane Humrich

  • motunes88
    motunes88 on December 15, 2011 03:57

    Hey Geoff,

    The accompaniment was just fine. Every instrument was intact and causing no harm to composition. The composition did not have too many transitions; the transitions kept the composition unique and different from the usual pieces. Don't worry about the last 4 measures. Listen to it and let it marinate. I know you will figure something out on those last 4.

    Best,

    Moshe

  • EZ_Duzzit
    EZ_Duzzit on December 14, 2011 17:50

    Geoff,
    Your take on the piece is interesting, the melody is nicely written and the accompaniment provides great motion.
    1.) Did you feel like the accompaniment (piano) would get too busy with the other instruments being to slow in the background and the piano would then become its own melody and rhythm without the help of the other instruments?
    No, I actually think the accompaniment provided a lot of the rhythm for the piece and it supports the bass line well in my opinion.

    2.) Did you feel like the song had too many transitions? Or other words, was there too much change and not enough repetition between all the instruments working together?
    Well not too many transitions, however I do think that the melody did not change enough around the 47 second mark, it sort of stayed constant while the bass changed. I believe a slight change in melody as the change in bass rhythm was established could have brought upon much better results. In Parts right before the changes between the B and C sections there are quarter rests which kind of stop the songs motion for brief moments, I think those spots should have some type of voicing to make the transitions feel a little more complete.

    3.) At times I felt that the last 4 measures changed too much in the piano and it didn’t quite finish the song to feel complete. It felt to abrupt to end the song. Was this an issue that you might have noticed as well?
    I don't believe it ended too abruptly, rather it was not really given a good leading tone to end the phrase comprehensibly, the reason it may have felt like it ended abruptly is because the tone's in the last 4 measures started well, while the tone's lead up to build a tension, they did not find their way back to tonic, thus the reason the piece may have felt incomplete to you.

  • EKAFEX
    EKAFEX on December 13, 2011 02:31

    Hi Geoff,

    I like what you did with the piece overall. Good Mix too!

    To answer your questions;

    1. I think there is a nice balance of all the instruments kind of "taking turns" being emphasized and I don't feel that the piano interferes with anything like your asking, because there are also various parts in which the piano is soft and retreats to the background. The piano having "busy" parts or getting louder dynamically just gives the impression that the instrument is being played with passion. I like it.

    2. I did not feel their were too many changes at all. In my opinion, I think variety is a good thing and I think you used it carefully and purposely to keep the it interesting to listen to all the way through.

    3. I think the ending is great. I did not think that the ending was too abrupt. The repetition in the bass line right before the closing gave the sense of suspense which lead nicely into the piano, especially since there were dynamics being used on the piano at the end it helped to end it nicely. The melody along with the piano at the last few measures compliments each other very nicely too.

    I do not have anything negative to say about your piece of music. I thought you did a good job.

  • ijpayne
    ijpayne on December 12, 2011 23:38

    Hello Geoff, ok I'm going to try to tackle these questions in short form. First I liked what you did in the sections that we had to create melodies and bass lines and lead lines. Do I feel like the piano was too much. honestly with this piece it was all over the place. at times it was more than what I would have done but on the other hand it fit the piece. I feel the Song moved A Lot but that's what created great drama and I felt you did a great job following the appointed sections when asked. You know at the end Of the piece I thought the same thing that it ended very abruptly and was not the normal ending that i would have expected to hear. Again you found a way to bring your ideas and musical style to this piece. very nice..
    Ivan Payne

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